RockinRoel

Impression.

Just in time I caught the blue spots
hidden in an aquarelle of red and brown

I stopped and took a closer look
It was amazing, all that beauty

Absolutely
I close my eyes
I'm loving it
and all the people
say it's alright
it's meant to be

I love the figures, I love the shape
I love it all, I love the taints

I take a brush and draw me near
I kiss the horizontal stripes

they curl up
and her eyes close
she's enjoying this
and all the people
say it's alright
it's meant to be

I paint more reds and browns and blue spots
because she still missed something

at a closer look, it makes a fantastic blend
it's not as nice, but it fits

It's finished
we close our eyes
we're living it
and all the people
they will say,
they will say
it's alright
it's meant to be

I step inside the picture, united forever
we'll grow old together

people will pay millions for this painting
it's total beauty achieved at last

but how come you don't want it?
This is a dream, this is a dream
this painting can't be real
this is a dream, this is a dream
it can't be real

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It's actually just an update of the other one, but the other one sucked. What do you think of the new one?

I heard of BandAMP from Zeroguy, so I thought I'd give it a shot and see what you think of it. It's called "impression: cœur chantant" but it's subject to change, maybe by your advice. Here goes: (this is a quick, probably unfinished version, not really a lyric yet)

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Impression, cœur chantant
Just in time I caught the blue spots
Hidden in an aquarelle of red and brown

I was amazed by her beauty

I love the figures, I love the shape
I feel like kissing the red stripe

Yet she misses something

I take a brush and draw me near
Paint more reds and browns and blue spots

Not as nice, but it fits

Red line touches red line
United on a million dollar picture

Blue spots count to four

I step back, take a look at it
provide a finishing touch

She's the artist, not I

This is a dream
This painting can't be real
This is a dream
This painting can't be real
This is a dream
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Just tell me what you think of it and please be critical yet constructive. (I haven't had much constructive comments yet, only approving comments)
Of course the first two lines were the ones that came to my mind first, for they are the best lines.